By Karen Cioffi, Children's Writer
I get a lot of clients who want to tell children something through a book.
These people want to send a message in hopes of teaching the reader something … something the author thinks is important.
People who want to write children’s stories usually want to teach and enlighten children, whether it's about bullying, being yourself, being kind, or something else.
This is a noble endeavor - the problem, though, is children don’t want to be told what they should or shouldn’t do. They want a story that they can get involved in, one they want to turn the pages to find out what happens next, and one they can connect with the main character.
The ‘icing on the cake’ is what the reader takes away from the book, the takeaway value.
So as an author, how do you get your message across without hitting kids over the head?
To start, the story should be about something kids will want to read about. And it should not overtly be about the message.
I recently read a client’s manuscript that flooded the story with the author’s message. Nothing was subtle.
So how do you tone down your message to weave it seamlessly and subtly into your story?
One way, if you’re writing a story because of a message you have, is to think of a scenario where your message could play out.
Your message or moral takeaway may be about doing the right thing, even if tempted.
Suppose the story is about Sammy, a kid who’s basically honest.
Sammy and his friends find a bag of money on a shelf in the garage of an elderly neighbor they’re cleaning the garage for.
It’s a lot of money, and Josh wants to split the money between himself, Sammy, and another friend.
After thinking about it for a minute, Sammy tells Josh to put the money back.
A few seconds later, the elderly neighbor walks into the garage.
Sammy was tempted. He probably thought all sorts of things before finally realizing it was wrong.
Nowhere in the story should it say, ‘Crime doesn’t pay.’
Let the reader come up with their own conclusions.
If the story is written right, the reader will get the takeaway value without realizing they are … without the author hitting them over the head with it.
A story that takes the protagonist on a journey should result in him growing in some way.
Using Sammy above as an example, maybe he wasn’t sure what to do under those circumstances. Maybe he thought about being dishonest in the past. Maybe he struggled with his honesty in little things.
He chose the right path and learned something about himself. He was an honest kid.
Again, your young reader wants a good story. They want to go on a journey – messaging should not be a part of that journey.
ABOUT THE AUTHOR
Karen Cioffi is an award-winning children’s author, ghostwriter, editor, rewriter, and coach. If you need help with your story, click HERE.
Karen also offers authors:
FICTION WRITING FOR CHILDREN COURSE
A guided self-study course and mentoring program.
HOW TO WRITE A CHILDREN'S FICTION BOOK
A DIY book to help you write your own children’s book.
WRITERS ON THE MOVE PRESS
Self-publishing help for children’s authors.
